Coverage Inc. feedback

 The rejection letter runs thus:

 

"Hi Erik,

Thanks for letting us check out PILLOW QUEEN . Attached please find your analysis. Lots of good stuff here, but work to be done as well (there always is.) Check out the notes and let me know what you think.

Since the screenplay did not score a “consider” for script, it unfortunately does not get passed along to our managers at the end of the Get Repped Now! promotion. However, we wish you the best of luck and wind at your back on the next draft and hope that these notes give you the ammo you need to make this one really rock. And by the by, Get Repped Now! Will return in the spring.

If you have any follow-up questions for the reader, please let us know. Best of luck with the next draft, and thanks again for using Coverage Ink!

 

Sincerely,

 

Jim C."

 

Incidentally, no notes were attached.

 

For once I'd like to run into someone who can tell me what's wrong with this script, then give me advice on how the fuck to fix it!

 

Also, I'd like to find someone who doesn't get angry about the subject matter or content of this script and will give me constructive criticism, instead of a diatribe or slew of misguided rants.

Alas, perhaps PJ McNeil was right and I need to do some heavy re-writing, but, again, I need someone to give me direction as to what I need to do to fix this script... I need a springboard for my revisions.

 

I am perfectly willing to stick this script in a drawer and chalk it up to a "failed cinematic/literary experiment".

I could also start a Kickstarter campaign to fund it as an independent film and direct the damn thing myself.

We shall see.

After all, who the hell saw uneven art house movies like Repulsion or Taxis Driver and said,

"The directors of these movies will one day be A-lister Oscar winners!"?

Or, "This movie will make huge stars out of its entire cast!"

Hardly anyone, I'm sure.

Same logic, I feel, applies to Pillow Queen.

People aren't getting it on the page... Perhaps they'll get it if its rendered visually.